asher
11th Apr '08 Fri, 14:45
As per requested by the host of the contest vandie i'll be making this official voting thread for the Poem of the week2.
Please vote only 1 entry...
Vote for what you think is the best entry...
Newly registered members from April 7, 2008 are not allowed to vote...
Unexplained votes will not be counted...
You may use this criteria as a guide in voting:
Structure of the poem
-Content and relativity to the theme "Evil Angel"
-Use of the added words:
1. Frost
2. Rose
3. Smile
Voting for your own entry is not allowed!
Voting Closes April 16 at exactly 12mn Philippine time.
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Entries
Entry no. 1
Ferofax
Part II
i've seen a man who wasn't there,
he wasn't there before;
but now this man who isn't there,
is knocking on my door.
i asked the man, "what do you want?
and why are you not there?"
the man replied, "its 'cause i'm not,
but no one is aware.
i came to tell, i came to warn,
what life remains, what death will take.
that though it seems, for now, you dream,
but soon, you will awake.
and this awakening is due,
more sooner than you think;
for there is doom surrounding you,
and snatch you in a wink."
a sudden breeze that swept just past
it bit so sharp like frost;*
it seemed to chill, within, without,
and all my warmth is lost.
the man who wasn't there was gone,
a rose he left behind;
it wilted by my touch alone,
till dust is all i find.
the wind, it blew this dust away,
far beyond the glare;
and there he stands, to my dismay,
the man who wasn't there.
he smiled, he called, a beckoning,
a dark and brooding stare;
with one swift act, a reckoning...
and then i wasn't there.
Entry no. 2
Dark Abyss
In darkness I found myself
Surrounded ny lonliness
Everything seems motionless
I tried to scream and hope this is nothing but a dream
My soul was frost
My life, almost lost
I'm as lifeless as I can be
Why did you let this happen to me?
Outside you'll see me crying
Inside you'll see I'm dying
I don't want to get lost
I don't want my soul to frost
I love my life, for it is like a rose
Full of beautiful memories to embose
But now everything is too late
My life had become death's bait
All I can do now is cry
I don't have anything else to try
I am now traveling the road of death, every step I take is a mile
My suffering ended because of my death, and I'll repay you through my smile
Entry no. 3
Reply to Robert Frost “Fire and Ice”
If some say that this world will end in fire and ice,
Will a word from above will still suffice?
For the word from above is love and God it is.
Is end still necessary to be missed?
You’ve seek thoughts of some who say
But you’ve never asked the one who teach.
You’ve tasted your own desire.
Have you found your world FROST in ice or burn in the fire?
The end will come to those who want it,
But it flees for those who have faith.
A ROSE that grows with anger within its thorns,
A king that rises and reaches his throne.
Life and death, which is certain?
What comes and goes away?
A human that lives and die someday?
Smile now Robert Frost,
For you have now found true end.
But sadly, a dead cannot.
Entry no. 4
-Burial-
. . .so quick so subtle, this image I spent. . .
. . .to make me conscious, up above he lent. . .
. . .the toll the problems, the funny aftermath. . .
. . .fame money and the swift sharp blood bath. . .
. . .ten years to fifty, pass along so slick. . .
. . .emotions are covered, you're healthy so sick. . .
. . .smile and the laughter will come at begin. . .
. . .but as the train passes, you know now your sin. . .
. . .time will come for each of us all. . .
. . .celebrate the moment and then watch the down fall. . .
. . .I hail you, I praise you, his words we will give. . .
. . .hate fist and anger, the lies and the fibs. . .
. . .surrounded with faces you all begin to laugh. . .
. . .the nights full of love, the great starry bash. . .
. . .then winter will come, the cold will then seep. . .
. . .frost bitten you lay on the ground that's so deep. . .
. . .covered with roses as the room begins to mourn. . .
. . .oh is it so fair when they're all full of thorns. . .
. . .you'll sleep finally, for centuries to come. . .
. . .the land will then wither, they'll burn you well done. . .
. . .for now give thanks with the moments we all have. . .
. . .it wont be so long, till we say goodbye dad. . .
. . .and then comes your turn to lay on your soft bed. . .
. . .but this is reality, there's no life after death. . .
Entry no. 5
Rose Frosted Smile
Five steps from here,
In profound darkness,
Enveloped with shades of black,
I see a soft beacon of light.
Four steps from here,
In the dim space where I stand,
Gazing in the flicker of that light,
My veins pulsing so tight.
Three steps from here,
Where the two gods meet,
One named Vishnu and one named Shiva,
Strikes me with the awe of choice.
Two steps from here,
As the gods fall down,
I was left alone in the light, and
Saw an image that pulled me onward.
One final step from here,
Slowly the image materialize,
Held my hand and left me,
With a Rose Frosted Smile.
Entry no. 6
Unmark
i can feel the warmth...
of the dirt as it hit my face...
it is almost welcome...
welcome indeed, where
i am covered in frost, freezing cold...
i can barely hear you crying...
its almost a song...
a soft melody...
accompanied by the wind...
a lullabye to send me away...
i can smell the roses...
you gently showered upon me...
that sweet sweet scent,
it reminds me of our happy days...
i'll never forget your smile...
and as the earth closed
in front of my eyes...
and darkness enveloped my new world...
i ask only one, please
don't leave my grave unmarked...
Entry no. 7
A Visitor
In the distant view,
A clearer one,
I aim to the north.
With my body nearly to frost,
I waited for the accurate timing,
Waited for the right spot;
As I edge to the end,
A visitor was there.
Showing cards on his hands,
Different from each other;
Gnarled with dried roses,
Abducted some of the smiles
All my preparation was gone.
All was out of my hands.
I didn’t know why,
I didn’t notice how,
But as he spoke to me,
Heard his voice
I learned a lot.
It’s time to depart.
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Disqualified entry
Reason: Violated the rule "Foul or Offensive words are strictly prohibited."
She Killed Me Alive (Almost Easy)
Come back to me, its so damn easy!!
Memories: that left my heart bleeding..
Recollect the things I've done to you,
The fact remains, our love wont renew.
In misery, I will be drowning..
Life's mystery's so damn confusing!!
I am not insane, no, not insane..
Your f*cking selfish, you left me stained..
You left me here, I'm dead but breathing!
The frost on your lips are not melting..
You destroyed my soul, tore me apart..
Like roses' thorns entangling my heart!
Come back again! It's almost easy!
Memories: story of tragedy..
Tears on your corpse, your blood on the knife..
Why did you smile when you took your life?
Please vote only 1 entry...
Vote for what you think is the best entry...
Newly registered members from April 7, 2008 are not allowed to vote...
Unexplained votes will not be counted...
You may use this criteria as a guide in voting:
Structure of the poem
-Content and relativity to the theme "Evil Angel"
-Use of the added words:
1. Frost
2. Rose
3. Smile
Voting for your own entry is not allowed!
Voting Closes April 16 at exactly 12mn Philippine time.
----------------------------------------------------------
Entries
Entry no. 1
Ferofax
Part II
i've seen a man who wasn't there,
he wasn't there before;
but now this man who isn't there,
is knocking on my door.
i asked the man, "what do you want?
and why are you not there?"
the man replied, "its 'cause i'm not,
but no one is aware.
i came to tell, i came to warn,
what life remains, what death will take.
that though it seems, for now, you dream,
but soon, you will awake.
and this awakening is due,
more sooner than you think;
for there is doom surrounding you,
and snatch you in a wink."
a sudden breeze that swept just past
it bit so sharp like frost;*
it seemed to chill, within, without,
and all my warmth is lost.
the man who wasn't there was gone,
a rose he left behind;
it wilted by my touch alone,
till dust is all i find.
the wind, it blew this dust away,
far beyond the glare;
and there he stands, to my dismay,
the man who wasn't there.
he smiled, he called, a beckoning,
a dark and brooding stare;
with one swift act, a reckoning...
and then i wasn't there.
Entry no. 2
Dark Abyss
In darkness I found myself
Surrounded ny lonliness
Everything seems motionless
I tried to scream and hope this is nothing but a dream
My soul was frost
My life, almost lost
I'm as lifeless as I can be
Why did you let this happen to me?
Outside you'll see me crying
Inside you'll see I'm dying
I don't want to get lost
I don't want my soul to frost
I love my life, for it is like a rose
Full of beautiful memories to embose
But now everything is too late
My life had become death's bait
All I can do now is cry
I don't have anything else to try
I am now traveling the road of death, every step I take is a mile
My suffering ended because of my death, and I'll repay you through my smile
Entry no. 3
Reply to Robert Frost “Fire and Ice”
If some say that this world will end in fire and ice,
Will a word from above will still suffice?
For the word from above is love and God it is.
Is end still necessary to be missed?
You’ve seek thoughts of some who say
But you’ve never asked the one who teach.
You’ve tasted your own desire.
Have you found your world FROST in ice or burn in the fire?
The end will come to those who want it,
But it flees for those who have faith.
A ROSE that grows with anger within its thorns,
A king that rises and reaches his throne.
Life and death, which is certain?
What comes and goes away?
A human that lives and die someday?
Smile now Robert Frost,
For you have now found true end.
But sadly, a dead cannot.
Entry no. 4
-Burial-
. . .so quick so subtle, this image I spent. . .
. . .to make me conscious, up above he lent. . .
. . .the toll the problems, the funny aftermath. . .
. . .fame money and the swift sharp blood bath. . .
. . .ten years to fifty, pass along so slick. . .
. . .emotions are covered, you're healthy so sick. . .
. . .smile and the laughter will come at begin. . .
. . .but as the train passes, you know now your sin. . .
. . .time will come for each of us all. . .
. . .celebrate the moment and then watch the down fall. . .
. . .I hail you, I praise you, his words we will give. . .
. . .hate fist and anger, the lies and the fibs. . .
. . .surrounded with faces you all begin to laugh. . .
. . .the nights full of love, the great starry bash. . .
. . .then winter will come, the cold will then seep. . .
. . .frost bitten you lay on the ground that's so deep. . .
. . .covered with roses as the room begins to mourn. . .
. . .oh is it so fair when they're all full of thorns. . .
. . .you'll sleep finally, for centuries to come. . .
. . .the land will then wither, they'll burn you well done. . .
. . .for now give thanks with the moments we all have. . .
. . .it wont be so long, till we say goodbye dad. . .
. . .and then comes your turn to lay on your soft bed. . .
. . .but this is reality, there's no life after death. . .
Entry no. 5
Rose Frosted Smile
Five steps from here,
In profound darkness,
Enveloped with shades of black,
I see a soft beacon of light.
Four steps from here,
In the dim space where I stand,
Gazing in the flicker of that light,
My veins pulsing so tight.
Three steps from here,
Where the two gods meet,
One named Vishnu and one named Shiva,
Strikes me with the awe of choice.
Two steps from here,
As the gods fall down,
I was left alone in the light, and
Saw an image that pulled me onward.
One final step from here,
Slowly the image materialize,
Held my hand and left me,
With a Rose Frosted Smile.
Entry no. 6
Unmark
i can feel the warmth...
of the dirt as it hit my face...
it is almost welcome...
welcome indeed, where
i am covered in frost, freezing cold...
i can barely hear you crying...
its almost a song...
a soft melody...
accompanied by the wind...
a lullabye to send me away...
i can smell the roses...
you gently showered upon me...
that sweet sweet scent,
it reminds me of our happy days...
i'll never forget your smile...
and as the earth closed
in front of my eyes...
and darkness enveloped my new world...
i ask only one, please
don't leave my grave unmarked...
Entry no. 7
A Visitor
In the distant view,
A clearer one,
I aim to the north.
With my body nearly to frost,
I waited for the accurate timing,
Waited for the right spot;
As I edge to the end,
A visitor was there.
Showing cards on his hands,
Different from each other;
Gnarled with dried roses,
Abducted some of the smiles
All my preparation was gone.
All was out of my hands.
I didn’t know why,
I didn’t notice how,
But as he spoke to me,
Heard his voice
I learned a lot.
It’s time to depart.
----------------------------------------------------------
Disqualified entry
Reason: Violated the rule "Foul or Offensive words are strictly prohibited."
She Killed Me Alive (Almost Easy)
Come back to me, its so damn easy!!
Memories: that left my heart bleeding..
Recollect the things I've done to you,
The fact remains, our love wont renew.
In misery, I will be drowning..
Life's mystery's so damn confusing!!
I am not insane, no, not insane..
Your f*cking selfish, you left me stained..
You left me here, I'm dead but breathing!
The frost on your lips are not melting..
You destroyed my soul, tore me apart..
Like roses' thorns entangling my heart!
Come back again! It's almost easy!
Memories: story of tragedy..
Tears on your corpse, your blood on the knife..
Why did you smile when you took your life?